Shameless Self Promotion

[DavidSinclair]

I just finished our ad for the State Fair issue of the Show Circuit and thought that I would share. Please let me know if you see any spelling errors (I am a notoriously bad speller) or have any ideas to make it better. I have until the 10th for camera ready.

Thanks for looking - DS

 

[LN]

A couple suggestions.

The paragraph about what the sale offering I shortened to:Sale calves will consist of 25 steers and heifers. This group will be the top end or our own calf crop plus a few we have purchased from other top breeders in the country.

Also, the white text in all caps is hard to distinguish where a sentence ends and a new one begins. The first time I read it I didn't notice the period and thought it was a run-on sentence until I went back and re-read and noticed the period. Although it may appear more distinctly in a magazine, but that's what I saw from the file posted here.

My 2 cents from what I learned in my copy editing class.

LN

 

[vet tech]

I think your background picture is beautiful!

 

[LN]

I think your background picture is beautiful!

Agreed, great picture!

 

[jason]

Good theme, awesome background


I have one that I was tooling around with that I will post, but no laughs.  It was NOT used in the magazine, I got voted down by everyone involved.  (lol)

 

[jason]

again, not used in a magazine

 

[herefordfootball]

Bought a heifer calf last year from sinclairs, they have darn good cattle and are great people to  work with.

chris

 

[justintime]

David, a very catchy ad. It should get people's attention. Question... what are those big grasshoppers in the background of the picture. I was not aware that you had grasshoppers that big in Indiana. By the way, if you lived closer, there are people here in Western Canada who would kill for a hay crop like that.  Great marketing and promotion! Congrats.

 

[gocanes719]

The picture was taken at David's brother in-laws ranch in Lamesa,Tx. 

 

[justintime]

I am amazed how much that picture looks like where I live. I could easily convince people that it was taken on my farm.Wide open spaces. Flat as a 4 day old glass of beer. On a clear day here, I can see the back of my head! Looks like it might be the same where this picture was taken

 

[jbzdad]

I think the light blue text in the upper right(sky) is difficult to read ... could it be black?

 

[Cattledog]

I think the light blue text in the upper right(sky) is difficult to read ... could it be black?

I don't think it could be.  It would contrast too much against the background and take away from the soft background. 

 

[Telos]

Great photo and design layout. I'll have to agree with LN's comments. Anywhere you can simplify is usually a good idea.

 

[TJ]

I like it.  I'd leave the bigger bold white letters alone, but I'd consider turning most of the smaller, non-bold white letters to a pinkish/orangish color (like the color used in "visit our website"), IMHO.

 

[DavidSinclair]

Thanks for all of the help.

This will probably be the last version I get a chance to work on. I shortened the text some and added an extra space between sentences. I can’t give a firm number on the calves because in the past when I did and we were under that number people thought we had sold some before the sale. The color thing is a little tricky to judge not only because the difference in monitors but also you have to convert from CMYK to RGB to be viewed on the net. Besides that I have done all of our own ads for the past 8 years and I still can’t get the color to match in different magazines.

The background is actually 2 different pictures.  The “sky” is an old shot I had from home and the bottom “hay field” is one that I took last week in Lamesa, TX. The little boy is my 2yr old Gavin. (My brother in-law got about 5.5 bales / acre off of that ½ pivot)

Thanks again - DS

Jason – your ad would definitely get my attention but I am not so sure it would make me want to buy a calf  <cowboy>

 

[Show Dad]

Jason are you the Shamwow guy? Or is he your idol?

 

[jason]

Jason are you the Shamwow guy? Or is he your idol?

Well I haven't arrested lately for punching a hooker, so I am going to have to say no.  ;D


Just goofing around.

 

[Show Dad]

I just wondered because somebody that goofy could only be from Emporia.